I... don't really know. I can't really remember many of the monsters and villians, or characters in general, apart from Scooby Doo on Zombie Island, Scooby Doo and the Witch's Ghost and Schooby Doo and the Cyber Chase, and some misc episodes of the Scooby Doo Movies. xD;
I'd have to refresh my memories..
:D Perfect! Thats just how I imagined it xD
Ooooh, I didn't know you had FP stuff in here though~ I'll have to look at that sometime.
Part Two of the Hattori-Scooby Doo parody:
I was just re-watching an episode of Enies Lobby, and it occurred to me that Jyabura is actually rather gullible and easily excited. I'm so gonna exploit that. >:D But man, at the rate this is going, I wonder if CP9 is going to actually get around to solving mysteries. They haven't even started and they're already falling apart. XD
In case nobody reads my earlier comment, the main character in this story was supposed to be a boy. Not that I think it really matters, but somehow you all thought it was a girl.
Pink Elephants Part Two:
I love CP9 Scooby-Doo.
Hahaha, birds can't talk, Piratemarimo, you have a strange imagination, hahaha! .... wait a sec
"Helmock Solmes and Moktor Datson in Hounds of the Vaskerbilles"
piratemarimo, are you planning to submit PE2 for the Bi-Weekly? If so, let Kenny know that way I'll have more stories to review.~
(I'll also give reviews for "Working Title" and The Marvelous Adventures of Mr. M and I reach them on the Compendium thread. :))
My bi-weekly entry <__< It has absolutely nothing to do with any other stories, this is new.
Trying to kill Izaya........................ LIKE A BOSS!!
This was a story inspired by Sai-chan. Inspired by the two of us and these characters in the story are modeled on us as you will notice by the second sentence, but I hope it's suitable. I promise you the story will be more fantastical than this, Sai-chan. :P sorry it's so short (as usual) and ends in an odd spot but I kind of procrastinated on writing.
No title yet.the title is:
for my own reference, this was the general story idea inspired by Sai-chan, possibly subject to change :P
Last edited by piratemarimo; September 20th, 2011 at 07:02 PM. Reason: god I hope I'm not butchering you or your mom's personality <__<
I really like the way you build up a scene. You have a nice way of describing a picture and giving enough detail to create a good image and background without making it too heavy or letting the description dominate the story, which seems appropriate for this type of story. Scene transitions feel a bit jumpy and awkward, though, so it's a bit tricky to follow.
And um I normally don't do this but I know you're picky so I thought I should point this out...
The only 'flaw' I can see is my mom's clothes. xD; She's more of a... how you say... fashion girl. She loves high heeled black boots, short (sometimes leather) skirts and skinny jeans, and short shorts, rocker shirts... not overly so, you know, but I do love how you dipicted her. She does say 'howdy' and talks like that all the time. And she probably would call me Sai-Sai if my name were Saiya. You got my mom down pretty damn well considering I only told you so much about her.
A fictional name? How about... Samantha. Does that work?
Also, some little tidbits: She doens't like coffee, (she loves water and iced tea) and she tries to speak more politely when meeting new people. ex: 'Why hello there! My name is ___, how can I help you?' But when she gets to know them she becomes more laid back: 'What the fuck?! Hahahahaa! I can't believe it! Ya'll're serious? Really?!'
ah thanks for the new trivia. the funny thing is that I was hesitant to have her agree to coffee cuz in my mind I was like "Wait... does Sai-chan's mom drink coffee?" and I spent several long, agonizing minutes debating what to do for that part. lol I'm such a perfectionist. and then I usually describe characters with a few physical traits and then was like "Wait! What if she doesn't have brown hair?!" and stuff. I am so including your mom somehow in the dream world. perhaps in the form of a Ranger. Once we get there. I can see this taking awhile, since I want to build up our characters' friendship a little before we head off to our real adventures. While we're still talking about coffee, does your mom have any favorite snacks to go with her iced tea?
Nah, she doens't like coffee all that much if at all. xD My mom has blond hair. Interpret that however you like; her hair is also short. Basically I got my hair from the other half, lol. A ranger? Hm. She'd certainly be a sniper of sorts.
I love the building up of friendships~ the dynamics are all just so interesting.
Tacos. Or mexican food in general. Actually she's no where near as picky as me. However she's not so easy to feed that she'll eat a cow tounge or something--that's where her girly girl ness comes out. (Eeew! That's nasty!)
Finally! I'm getting around to reading stories today.
This one....I think is alright. I can't comment since this is something between you and Sai-Chan, but the least I can do for this community is give other people's stories a chance (as they did mine).
I'll be waiting for the next installment, but a good start right there.
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