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    Another Kitsune topic!? Eh, this one is for shorter works, like poems, songs, and short stories. I really want to share this poem I wrote for an assignment, because I really liked it.

    My Love, My Love

    My love, my love
    I present you fruit and flowers
    Hand-pick did I for hours
    My love, my love
    These fruits, they're ripe and sweet
    Have a taste, they cannot be beat

    My love, my love
    Just grant my offering chance
    Give in to its elated trance
    My love, my love
    Is not this fruit delicious?
    Smell these violets, they can grant wishes!

    My love, my love
    The sky, does it not spin?
    Why, 'tis only the sign of true ecstasy's begin
    My love, my love
    You are swimming in true passion
    Feel yourself flying, in true angel's fashion

    My love, my love
    The sounds, do they not grow silent?
    Worry not, care only of the plum and violets
    My love, my love
    Give in, there is no shame
    Worry not, you have the world to blame

    My love, my love
    Surrender to the aroma
    Feel as if the world is pushing you into coma
    My love, my love
    You must not try to resist!
    For if you do, this euphoria will surely be missed!

    My love, my love
    My gift, it makes you ill?
    Your eyes, why, they have gone still!
    My love, my love
    I only ask your pardon
    For I have fed forbidden fruits, hand-picked from Devil's Garden

    I really am curious what different ways you guys interpret it :D

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    Kitsune, you sick, sick man.

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    I will interpret that in a sec but first I must say this: Kitsune's a romantic?!?!?! Who knew? It's awesome, though. (I mean this in an amused but sincere way.)

    WAIT. Uncle Kenny's comment is making me doubt myself. KITSUNE INFERNO YOU FIEND WHAT HAVE YOU DONE.
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    o_O

    Oh God... you guys...

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    ... It's not my fault. I saw all the "my love" parts and went awwww, what a closet romantic Kitsune is.

    then I saw Uncle Kenny's post and my whole world was turned upside down. In an evil, evil way.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Uncle Kenny View Post
    Kitsune, you sick, sick man.
    Oh god! I saw this and my entire view just changed. Thank you so much Kenny...

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    I'm glad I could show you all the light.
    Last edited by Jazzy Jinx; November 4th, 2010 at 09:48 PM. Reason: V @Kitsune: Please have your lawyers consult with my lawyers and I'm sure we can work this all out.

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    God, Uncle Kenny, now my whole poem can be taken in a different light. D:

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    Okay Kitsune, I'll try to read your poem again and interpret it another way to give you comments. But it's really, really hard. Every time I see the word fruit...
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    D-dammit...
    Is it bad that I saw it the wrong way from the beginning? =.=

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    I'm sorry Kitsune. No matter how many times I read it it won't leave my mind.

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    D:

    If it's any consolation, the inspiration to the poem came from an off-hand comment about Snow White from a friend.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kitsune Inferno View Post
    D:

    If it's any consolation, the inspiration to the poem came from an off-hand comment about Snow White from a friend.
    That.....doesn't make it much better. It actually made it worse for me.

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    And I thought I had a perverted mind. Jesus, people.

    It's very good, Kitsune. I'm not much of a poet myself. I get bored really fast writing poetry.
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    -points at Uncle Kenny. quick, tie him to a stake and set the roaches on fire!

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    Okay Kitsune, here's the best I can give you. Long analysis cut short, the pursuer (I'm going to assume male here) is completely enamoured with a lady that I'm randomly going to call Cassandra. I take the fruit (ughunclekenny) to be a metaphor for his love, which he offers to her eagerly, desperately, pleadingly. But it turns out to be Cassandra's ruin, and the third stanza reminds me of drug-induced hallucinations. It seems like his love for her was too overwhelming, perhaps possessive. So initially in the poem, everything seems so romantic, and the way the persona offers his love makes people (at least, me) go awww. But all this obviously changes by the end. The fourth stanza is probably where things are supposed to change, but when I read the third one it already made me unsettled, like there was something very wrong - a sign of foreboding, perhaps. And in the end the guy is left wondering what he did wrong, how could his love have hurt the one he loved? And he comes to some kind of realisation, that the love he coaxed onto Cassandra was ill-fated from the start, and has only led to her ruin.

    Maybe it's a parallel to relationships where people think, oh because they love each other, nothing can possibly go wrong. But things get possessive and abusive, and one person's love ends up destroying the other person.

    Okay, this is a crappy review/interpretation and the most incoherent thing I've written in a while. I blame it on Uncle Kenny's chicken.
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    Everybody is so quick to point fingers at Uncle Kenny.

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    Wow, that's a bit deeper than what I was going for. :p

    To put it bluntly, the poem is meant to lead the reader to believe that the speaker is offering a lover a present, and is poetically exaggerating its affects on his/her senses.

    However, by the end of the poem, it is meant to be understood that the speaker had in fact poisoned their lover, while coercing the victim into thinking that they are in a euphoric state due to the fruit's quality.

    In other words, what seems to be a delicately painted declaration of love bears heavy, sinister undertones.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kitsune Inferno View Post
    Wow, that's a bit deeper than what I was going for. :p

    To put it bluntly, the poem is meant to lead the reader to believe that the speaker is offering a lover a present, and is poetically exaggerating its affects on his/her senses.

    However, by the end of the poem, it is meant to be understood that the speaker had in fact poisoned their lover, while coercing the victim into thinking that they are in a euphoric state due to the fruit's quality.

    In other words, what seems to be a delicately painted declaration of love bears heavy, sinister undertones.
    This was actually my interpretation but I wasn't expecting you to go that route so I dismissed my suspicions.

    Glad to see I was correct, anyway.~

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    Oh well. I fail, then. :P
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    No, no, no.

    I like your explanation better.

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