Blah, blah, blah. Stuff about reviews. Blah, blah, blah. Here's the January monthly's winner:
It's going to be fun.~
And now for the reviews:
And that's all folks! An extra special thanks to LaCaSiNa for giving such in-depth reviews and I guess piratemarimo as well! I was going to say I hated you for making me format Jay's review but you stroked my ego so I have no choice but to let it go! We had a lot of colorful entrees this time and they were all wonderful reads! Maybe I'll come back to this post later and make it prettier but for now, I have shit to do! Till next time, ta ta.~
We should do this every month.
And congrats to Kitty! :):)
Thanks so much, guys! My jaw is on the ground in shock that I actually WON! :D I don't know what else to say really, other than I'm really, really glad you all enjoyed it so much.~ Kenny, I'm pretty certain I am well under 40,000 characters. I just checked and it's BARELY over 14,000 characters. Were you that immersed? :P
Also, thanks for picking up my inspiration, LaCa. There's a lot of Scandinavian influence there. I don't like making up words, so everything's all rooted in something.~ Except maybe Alrus... I don't think there's any particular inspiration behind that name.
As for the setting, it is intentionally ambiguous in the Prologue. Here is a world, a fantasy world, where we are introduced to it in the future, after the story proper is long told. Granted, this kind of future sight will be a bit detrimental to a lot of the reveals that are to come in the story, but the fact that I wanted to make this setting so ambiguous is because, simply put, we don't know the balance of this world. It is intentionally so that I opted not to show the scars from the story proper. The end result, the true nature of the future world, should be surprising enough when it finally comes to it.
Now for the subject of Lorya. Will we see more of her? Of course! We will see Lorya as she is in the future setting, unraveling her story as we go, as well as Lorya in the proper setting, and what type of role she of all people will play in this setting. Look forward to it.~
Again, thank you for the reviews.~ It's awesome that you all enjoyed it so.~
I will already lower my pants while waiting for the punishment
And congrats Ki !
And god... Edward was blond, then I decided black hair would be better. But he remained blond in one sentence. :<
Thanks for the critiques :3.
And about cliche's. It is not a group of three, and definitly not a school drama. Just saying ;).
Congratulations Kitsune! You really cleaned house. :D
To address my reviews:
Marimo: Thanks for the grammar and wording critique. That is still one of my biggest weaknesses, embarrassingly enough. As for Faiba and the ShikaPlus, those are introduced in part one of Yukino (Spring), so they've already been explained. >>; Still, I'll try and make this arc enjoyable without have to do too much research.
@LaCa: Another one joins the herd.
Just for clarification, Issei is hanging around girls above legal age. You probably already knew that but once before it's been asked if he was a pedo. No he's not, he's just horny. ^^;
I'll be sure to clean up the opening. Oh and the phrase 'from the top' is short for 'take it from the top', which in turns mean to start over.
Okay okay let me explain: I save paragraph spaces for breaks in time and place. I do that because adding a dash between them seemed ugly to me. But for this forum I can compromise and start doing that. When I publish Yukino I'll probably go back to only spacing for breaks (but who knows, I might be converted).
As for the informality, well, the tone is only as formal as the person it's following. Issei's clinical perspective and Yukino's former innocence made it easier to write in a straight forward way, but now that she's a lot more angry her perspective is going to be more angry and bitter. However, since you and LaCa commented on the cursing I'll give it another run through.
Thanks for the critiques everyone.
*On the way to the General Discussion Threads*
*Trips over stone*
BWAHH??! What This?! I appear to have fallen into a new, unexplored area!
*Brushes self off, Gazes around at THE WRITING Thread*
Now then, let's take a gander at the rulebook here, shall we?
My current (and future) plots will heavily use dark, grim elements & aspects (semi-darker than what was projected in Arkham Asylum/City, but not by too much I assure you, and that's primarily for FUTURE Projects), but quite a few characters frequently employ language, and I'll say that the majority of the villain(s) in my stories will be on the...other side.
Again, stuff like that is more for future projects that I just have securely filed away inside my mind, and as it stands now, I'm probably over-exaggerating things here and fretting a bit too much over trivial matters, but regardless, if judges have any concerns or questions; feel free to shoot the breeze with me. I do know that I currently have at least one character like this for my current story, though. Oh, very, very much...
Now about my Submission...
I have to tweek a few things in my current story, change around locations & a little dialouge, but if everything goes right, I'll might be able to make the 29th deadline. No pinky promises though, as I also have an essay to focus on for my critical thinking course and other assignments, so of course I have to take care of that as well. But I'll see what I can do. If studies prevent me from making the deadline (40% chance of that happening), then I will most promisingly enter for the March Madness contest.
That said, WELCOME ME.
Welcome with a don! As for your rating concern, I had a sex scene in one of my submissions, which I glossed over significantly. Anything you can expect to see in a PG-13/low-end R movie is fair game. I mean, language, blood, and gore are one thing. Hardcore word porn is another.
Welcome Mr333 , and yes I'll keep calling you like that
Sorry I haven't updated this thread yet. About that, I have a really big announcement, so please stay tuned this weekend.
Also, I'm still looking for two judges for the February monthly. Any volunteers?
Good news, so I should have my submission entered by Friday the 24th at the earliest, or by Sunday the 26th at the latest.
I'm to create a writing thread for my submission, and then link it here, right?
It's been a hard day's night, and I've been working like a dog. It's been a hard day's night, I should be sleeping like a log. But when I get home to you, I find the things that you do will make me feel alright. You know I feel alright, yeah.
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